Interesting idea, production needs some work
There are some interesting riffs in there, I particularly liked the one that started around 1:45
I appreciate that you may have intentionally kept it as a guitar-only piece, but I want to hear some other instruments in your work soon! Get a kit in there.
When it comes to your guitars, if you're gonna get really serious about recording, I would seriously recommend investing in a Line 6 Pod or Digidesign box. My Pod improved my guitar recording quality hugely, and remains the best thing I've ever purchased.
Also, are you using a metronome? If not, you really should get into doing so. It just makes recording, double-tracking, re-recording, mixing, everything easier.
Good job though, I hope to hear more from ya.